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Title: Masterpiece [Soubi/Ritsuka]
Rating/Warnings: PG for paint of the not-edible variety (sorry guys, I'm getting there, I swear)
Summary: It's the imperfections that give a masterpiece its charms.
AN: why can't I STOP?! So, there's some art involved here, but bear in mind that I can't draw kind of at all. Also, anybody who gets the Wakato joke gets a million points.


Masterpiece

These morning classes have to go, Soubi thought to himself as he stepped out of his door. He yawned as he fumbled the door locked and twisted the handle to test it, then began down the stairs, footsteps clanking on the rusty metal. One of these days this things is going to rust right out, Soubi mused, and I'll put my foot through one of these steps and end up…

The thought trailed off as Soubi came around the corner of the landing and found Ritsuka on the bottom step, leaning his head against the railing's support. Fear of the decrepit stairs forgotten, Soubi moved to kneel in front of Ritsuka in a blur of motion, textbooks dropped unceremoniously in the dirt. Ritsuka's ears were folded down tightly, and he refused to lift his gaze from the ground.

"Are you all right?" Soubi asked, already reaching for the cut that stretched from Ritsuka's jaw down over his chin.

"Soubi." Ritsuka's ears flickered in irritation at the stupidity of the question, but he didn't stop Soubi from probing the wound lightly.

"It was too long to cover?" Soubi asked, and Ritsuka gave a minute nod. "So you didn't want to go to school. Oh, Ritsuka."

"I shouldn't've come!" Ritsuka tried to stand, but was scooped up in Soubi's arms before he got any further, and was being carried up the stairs. The fifth stair creaked alarmingly under the weight, but Soubi barely even noticed.

"You left your books," Ritsuka pointed out while Soubi failed utterly to negotiate the door.

"It's okay." The door swung open to reveal a sleep-mussed Youji, wearing worn pajama pants at least six inches too long. "Thank you."

"You woke me up, I just got back to sleep." Youji yawned and peered at Ritsuka. "Oi, brat. Shouldn't you be in school?"

"Shouldn't you?" Soubi asked, edging past Youji, leaving the Zero to pull the door shut.

"Don't be stupid." Youji yawned hugely again, then shuffled back over to the futon he was sharing with Natsuo and flopped down into the next of blankets. When Soubi glanced over at them after setting Ritsuka down on his own bed, Zero was already tangled tightly around one another, a foot and a red ear the only thing visible. One of them was snoring softly.

Ritsuka sat cross-legged on Soubi's bed, staring silently at his feet while Soubi cleaned the cut on his face, and also rewrapped the bandage on his right hand that blood was seeping through. He couldn't keep from pressing a kiss into the bandaged palm.

"Let me see." Ritsuka twisted his hand around to grip Soubi's hand, which still was wrapped lightly although the nail-hole was mostly healed. Soubi didn't protest while Ritsuka carefully peeled away the gauze and cleaned both sides before wrapping it back up.

"We match," Soubi said, lacing his injured hand with Ritsuka's so that their bandages pressed together lightly. "I'm almost as cute as Ritsuka."

"Soubi!" Ritsuka snatched his hand away and scowled, but his ears were no longer pressed tightly back against his scalp. Soubi tweaked one for luck, chuckling, and then got up to make tea.

An hour or so later, Kio slammed the door open to find Ritsuka stretched out on the bed beside Soubi, watching him sketch, their cold mugs set aside on the floor.

"I should've known." Kio thumped Soubi's rather dirty books down on the counter. "Normal people oversleep, but you're too busy running a shelter for strays!"

"Jealous?" Natsuo had struggled from bed finally and appeared behind Kio, who jumped about six inches. Youji stumbled after him, rubbing his eyes.

"No!" Kio snapped, leaving the books on the counter and going over to lean against the windowsill. "Because I'm not a pervert!"

Soubi and Ritsuka exchanged a glance, and Ritsuka wrinkled his nose, making Soubi laugh.

"I wouldn't be laughing if I were you!" Kio crossed his arms and glared at Soubi. "You've already missed three classes!"

"You had class this morning?" Ritsuka demanded. "Soubi, why didn't you say?!"

"It's university," Soubi ruffled the hair between Ritsuka's ears. "I don't have to go to all my classes, so long as I turn my work in."

"Well, you have to go to this one," Kio sniffed. "The model'll only be here today!"

"I'm busy." Soubi smiled at Ritsuka. Behind Kio, Zero made a gagging noise. "Something came up."

"Soubi…" Kio started, but Ritsuka bounced to his knees.

"Soubi!" Ritsuka gave Soubi's shoulder a little shove. "You shouldn't skip your classes! You have to go!"

"And where are you going to go? Home?" Soubi asked coolly, and Ritsuka dropped his eyes. Soubi's expression turned thoughtful. "Would you like to come with me?"

"To class?" Ritsuka's eyes widened, then narrowed suspiciously as he turned to look at Kio. "Can I?"

"Oh sure!" Kio threw his hands in the air. "Why doesn't everybody just come along! You freaks too, the more the merrier!"

"We'll pass, thanks," Natsuo reported. Youji reached up to snap Natsuo's eyepatch elastic playfully.

"It's a studio class," Soubi shrugged, climbing out of bed and offering Ritsuka a hand up. "No one will mind." Ritsuka ignored Soubi's hand and hopped off the bed to get his sneakers.

"I was kidding you know!" Kio exclaimed.

*******

Ritsuka's eyes were huge as he took in the spacious studio. Sunlight streamed in the wide windows that covered an entire wall, pouring warm rays over two dozen easels and pristine canvases. Art students milled about, chattering and mixing paints, gathering brushes and laughing. A male model about the same age as the students was lounging on a stool set up on a platform in the middle of the studio, wearing a silk robe with obviously nothing underneath, and several of the girls were standing in a clot near the platform, whispering and shooting appreciative gazes at him. Ritsuka grabbed for Soubi's hand and pressed closer to him.

"Get a room," Kio grumbled, striding off to claim an easel for Soubi and himself.

"Soubi, are you going to paint him?" Ritsuka asked.

"We all are," Soubi answered, twining his fingers through Ritsuka's.

"Soubi-kun!" a girl with a dark ponytail and jangly hoop earrings came up to Soubi and punched him playfully in the arm. "You skipped class again! Sleeping late as usual?" The girl glanced down and caught sight of Ritsuka. "Oh, how cute! And who are you, sweetie?"

"Er," Ritsuka squeezed Soubi's hand more tightly, and glanced between him and girl shyly. "I'm Aoyagi Ritsuka." Then he shot an irritated glance at Soubi. "As usual, hmm?" Soubi coughed a little.

"Oh, look at your ears!" The girl tweaked one of Ritsuka's ears, making his fur bristle. "So soft! Akiko, come here and see!"

"Ooh!" Another girl's head popped around the side of an easel. "He's so precious! Sakura, look!"

Suddenly Ritsuka found himself enveloped in a cloud of coos and giggles, as the girls in the class surrounded him, leaving behind bewildered male classmates. Ritsuka shot a pleading glance at Soubi, who was laughing too hard to actually help.

The ado was soon noticed by the model, who seemed more than a little put out at the loss of female attention.

"I don't see what's so special about him," he called from the platform, arms crossed. "He's just some kid." When that failed to elicit any response, the model strode down across the studio and elbowed his way into the mass of girls. "Who is he, anyway? Your boyfriend, Agatsuma?"

The model reached to yank one of Ritsuka's ears, but Soubi's hand shot out and grabbed his wrist.

"You don't want to do that," Soubi said pleasantly.

"Yeah, don't be such a jerk!" One of the girls said, and that was apparently the last straw. Nostrils flaring, the model jerked his hand out of Soubi's grip and stormed from the studio.

"Soubi?" Ritsuka looked up in horror at Soubi. "I shouldn't've come!"

"Oh, it's okay," the first girl soothed, ruffling Ritsuka's hair. "That Wakato is just a big drama queen. He can't go on without a hoard of fangirls."

"All right, class!" a woman with a messy bun and a long, red, swishy skirt swept into the room, clapping her hands together. "Please choose an easel and get to work, you only have this period to complete your masterpieces!" The teacher paused and glanced behind her at the empty stool. "And who would like to tell me what happened to the model? Again? An-chan?"

The dark-haired girl, who'd been trying to sneak to her seat without attracting notice, straightened and began shame-facedly relating the events of the last few minutes.

"And who are we to paint now, hmm?" the teacher inquired, tapping her foot.

"What about Ritsuka?" An suggested. Ears flattening, Ritsuka tried to duck behind Soubi, but the girl turned to him with pleading eyes. "Oh, say you will, Ri-chan! You're so cute, we'd love to paint you!"

"Soubi-kun?" the teacher asked, raising an eyebrow.

"Only if Ritsuka wishes." Soubi reached down to tilt Ritsuka's chin up. "You don't have to, but I would like to paint you too."

"I'll do it," Ritsuka said quietly after a long moment.

"Ritsuka, if you are not sure…" Soubi's hand had dropped to squeeze Ritsuka's shoulder.

"Soubi! I just said I'd do it!"

"You can't wear that though," the teacher said. She had approached while Soubi and Ritsuka were talking, and was now fingering the collar of Ritsuka's shirt. "The color doesn't suit you at all."

Ritsuka thought of the model in just the silk robe and swallowed hard. He turned pleading eyes to Soubi.

"Soubi, I don't have to…?"

"No, of course not, you're a child!" the teacher said briskly, and Soubi's grip loosened just a little. "But, instead, I think…Soubi-kun, may I borrow your shirt?"

Soubi blinked, than began undoing his white button-down shirt with a shrug. Several of the girls catcalled before the sensei shushed them, and Ritsuka giggled when a blush spread across Soubi's nose. The smile disappeared when he realized he'd have to take off his shirt as well to trade, but Soubi held his shirt up around Ritsuka while he stripped his pullover off so that no one could see.

Ritsuka was practically swimming in Soubi's shirt, the tails falling almost to his knees and the cuffs slipping down over his hands, but the teacher pronounced it a success and tugged him towards the platform. Soubi went to sit at the easel next to Kio and took the spare overshirt Kio was handing him. He smiled reassuringly at Ritsuka as he slid the shirt on, leaving it open when it wouldn't quite button across his chest. Ritsuka scowled when the pairs of girls next to Soubi and Kio edged their chairs a little closer.

"I knew it," Kio grumbled as he unscrewed tubes of paint. "I just knew something like this was going to happen. I'm a model, you could be painting my gorgeous body, but noooo."

"There, there, Kio," Soubi pulled an elastic out of his pocket and began tying up his hair. "We've all seen your body, after all."

Ritsuka giggled when he saw Kio stick his tongue out at Soubi, and the teacher, who was arranging the folds of the shirt over the stool, admonished him not to move so much. Some of the girls gave Ritsuka little waves and blew kisses, making Ritsuka blush, while the boys rolled their eyes in disgust.

Once the students all began to concentrate on painting, it wasn't as embarrassing, and Ritsuka began to look around the room a little, reminding himself mentally not to kick his feet. The shirt smelled like Soubi, warm and clean, and Ritsuka's gaze often drifted over to the fighter, watching the way the wisps slipping out of his ponytail brushed his neck. Ritsuka smiled just a little when he caught glints of silver and blue at Soubi's earlobes as he moved.

One of the girls in the front row heaved a sigh like her heart was breaking, and Ritsuka flushed again, tearing his eyes away from Soubi. Instead he occupied himself by watching the rays of sunlight slide across the studio floor, only occasionally sneaking a glance at the way it filtered through wisps of blond.

It didn't seem at all that hours had gone by the time the teacher clapped her hands again and began giving instructions. When the teacher announced that class was over, Ritsuka slid from the stool and hurried down from the platform, trying valiantly to ignore the girls' giggles and 'Thank you, Ri-chan's. He came to a stop between Kio and Soubi, and put his hand to his face in dismay when Kio's painting reminded him of the cut across his face. In all the excitement, he'd forgotten.

"Ritsuka?" Soubi was drawing him close and tugging his chin away from Kio's canvas with his left hand. His paintbrush was still in his right. "Don’t worry, it's the imperfections that give a masterpiece its charm."

Scowling, Ritsuka twisted hands in Soubi's borrowed shirt, the worn blue flannel softer than it looked. He only glanced at Soubi's painting as an afterthought, but then his breath caught in his throat.

"Soubi…" he murmured. "Soubi, I don't look like that."

"Mmm?" Soubi answered without looking at the painting. "People aren't my specialty, you know. Kio's is much better."

"You leave me out of it," Kio grumbled on the other side of Ritsuka, packing up his supplies. "And give me back my shirt before you get pervert on it."

"No, I mean…I don't…" Ritsuka fell silent, too embarrassed to get the words out that there was no way he looked so slender and graceful, so beautiful and sad. "Soubi…" Ritsuka shook his head to clear it, turning away from the painting. "Take your shirt back."

"Ritsuka can keep it," Soubi murmured, smoothing a line on the painting with the side of his index finger, then setting down the paintbrush. Kio threw his hands in the air. "Would you please pull the elastic out of my hair? My hands have paint all over them." Soubi wiggled his fingers in demonstration, then half-turned in his chair so Ritsuka could reach.

Ritsuka blinked, then reached hesitantly up to the band in Soubi's hair. He tugged a little, then held the ponytail tightly with one hand so the hair wouldn't pull when he slid the elastic out with the other. He smoothed Soubi's hair down a little without thinking about what he was doing, lingering over the kink that the elastic had bent into Soubi's hair because it felt strange against his palm. Soubi gave a low 'hmmm', and Ritsuka yanked his hand away.

******

Ritsuka stopped in front of the painting when it reappeared in Soubi's apartment a week or so later, leaning casually against the wall, and the sun dappling the bare floor made him remember the windows in the studio. He stood staring at the painting for a few minutes, until Soubi noticed and came over to put a hand on his shoulder.

"Sensei finished grading the class's work," he explained, one hand drifting up to brush the pale line that ran over Ritsuka's chin. "She gave them back today."

"What did you get?" Ritsuka asked, eyes still lingering on the painted figure that he still felt bore no more than a passing resemblance to him.

"I got an A for bringing the cutest model."

"Soubi!" Ritsuka knocked Soubi's hand away.

"I got an A," Kio groused from the doorway, hauling through a large plastic bag with him that presumably contained dinner. "You got a B minus because you can't paint lighting for shit, and also because you didn't copy Ritsuka well enough."

"You don't think it looks like me either!" Ritsuka exclaimed in relief. Soubi shook his head with a wry smile.

"What?" Kio set the bags down on the counter with a thump and came over to examine the painting with the other two. "No, it looks exactly like you. I mean, Soubi changed your pose. Look at your hands."

Ritsuka had been so occupied scrutinizing the face and figure, he hadn't even noticed the hands. While posing, Ritsuka had been clutching the edge of the stool between his legs, but in Soubi's painting, his hands were resting on the stool, lightly cupped together as if hiding something.

"It drove sensei crazy trying to figure out what you have him holding," Kio added, shaking his head. "I'm surprised she didn't fail your ass."

As Ritsuka was squinting at the painting, a breeze outside ruffled the leaves that grew near the window, making the light shift across the canvas, and Ritsuka thought he caught just a glimmer of blue and silver between the painted Ritsuka's fingers.

"It's a butterfly," Ritsuka said, then looked up at Soubi with wide eyes. "Isn't it?" Soubi answered by crushing Ritsuka against him in a hug, and Ritsuka struggled half-heartedly. "I can't breathe! Soubi!"

"Geez, always with the butterflies." Kio turned his back to them and went to deal with the food, adding a "you freak" for good measure.


Date: 2005-09-07 04:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] the-ameneko.livejournal.com
Mousapelli, you have hereby gotten me into yet another fandom before cannon. Now I have to read Loveless and HnG and PoT and I forget what else! What's next!?

Absolutely adorable story. Just made me go *squee* all the way through. So, so cute. Now, if only I knew what everybody looked like...



" "We'll pass, thanks," Natsuo reported. Youji reached up to snap her eyepatch elastic playfully. "

Isn't Natsuo a boy?

Date: 2005-09-07 04:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
haha, thanks, i live to suck people into my fandoms.

DAMN, i continually mess up Natsuo's gender. *fixes*

Date: 2005-09-07 05:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sangoire.livejournal.com
CHAAAANGE OOOOOVER! :3

Awww, this is so terribly cute, and the thought of Ritsuka all rumpled in Soubi's oversized dress shirts is actually hotter than I'm comfortable contemplating. That is, if HnG hadn't gotten me used to despising myself for being a borderline anime-boy pedophile.

I'm going to hell. But I'll bring this along to read on the way down! :D

Date: 2005-09-07 05:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] darkeyedwolf.livejournal.com
Mouse! MOUSE. Oh my god, this was so good -- I don't know who I loved most, Ritsuka with his angst and cuteness and self-doubt (the hell you didn't look beautiful and sad, you big woobie) or Soubi with his exposed late-morning habits and blushing when the girls catcalled and the way he held his shirt around Ritsuka so he wouldn't be embarrassed -- and then there was Kio with all his "freak" comments and the "don't get pervert on my shirt" (*HAD TO MUFFLE GIGGLES WITH FIST*) -- and oh, oh, Natsuo and Youji, their awesome little sleepy cameo with the gagging at Soubi + Ritsuka fluffiness -- and WAKATO. I don't know if you meant him to be like the tennis player, but I swear to god I kept expecting the fangirls to say "CHANGE -- OVER!" ♥ ♥ ♥

(You keep getting better and better, I swear. If you keep churning out fics at this rate then you'll be the end-all source for all good Loveless fanworks by the end of the month. Sooner, if you finally cave and write porn!)

"We match," Soubi said, lacing his injured hand with Ritsuka's so that their bandages pressed together lightly. "I'm almost as cute as Ritsuka."

I know I've squeed over this line before, but. CUTEST THING SAID BY SOUBI EVER, NO CONTEST. And this includes his thoughts in canon about Ritsuka's small back looking so cute. :)))

The model reached to yank one of Ritsuka's ears, but Soubi's hand shot out and grabbed his wrist.

"You don't want to do that," Soubi said pleasantly.


Ooh. *shivers with delight* I don't know about how plessant Soubi could sound in that situation -- I've always imagined him with more of "silent and serious" possessiveness than a falsely polite one -- but all you have to do is put him in control and in charge and I'm a puddle of wooed fangirl goo. Double goes for the way his grip on Ritsuka relaxed when he realized Ritsuka's naked body was still only for him his little Ri-chan wouldn't have to pose nude!

AND, YEAH, THAT WHOLE THING? WITH RITSUKA POSING? AND HOW HE KEPT LOOKING AT SOUBI?
LOVE <33333 SO MUCH LOVE <3333

One of the girls in the front row heaved a sigh like her heart was breaking, and Ritsuka flushed again

*echoed that sigh* What a fun, wonderfully descriptive line.

He smoothed Soubi's hair down a little without thinking about what he was doing, lingering over the kink that the elastic had bent into Soubi's hair because it felt strange against his palm.

OH GOD aldjfgf;ldss JUST HIT ALL MY KINKS IN ONE FIC, WHY DON'T YOU.

Oh, and a couple of typos, before I forget -- Soubi ruffled the hair between Ritsuka's hair. "We'll pass, thanks," Natsuo reported. Youji reached up to snap her eyepatch elastic playfully. -- but those were the only ones I saw during my quick read-through; I was bouncing up and down in my seat too much to really dig very thoroughly. *grins*

And, uh, uh, I realize I'm doing nothing but babbling random squee and quoting your own fic back to you, but I have to mention one more line (and it was chosen with great difficulty, I assure you! I wanted to pick out and love on a million more!):

"It's a butterfly," Ritsuka said, then looked up at Soubi with wide eyes. "Isn't it?" Soubi answered by crushing Ritsuka against him in a hug

Oh, man. Oh, oh man. Cue heart-squeeze. And the funny part is, I don't even know what that means! Has Soubi come around to butterflies and stopped despising them for their fragility, or did he draw Ritsuka cupping one as a kind of metaphor for himself, trapped but so thoroughly bound that no one can tell and he doesn't even try to escape? (<-- ph34r my horribly pathetic attempts at analyzing symbolism! Here is where you tell me that I'm totally reading into things that aren't there, and to shut up and appreciate the well-rounded ending without waxing all philosophical about it.)

LOOK, MY REVIEW IS PRACTICALLY LONGER THAN THE FIC. *shuts up* But know that I love this, and I love you, and you're totally dominating my memories right now. ♥ ♥

Date: 2005-09-07 05:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annapeace.livejournal.com
So cute! And "And give me back my shirt before you get pervert on it." just killed me dead!

Date: 2005-09-07 05:19 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fallenembers33.livejournal.com
OMG! I love it!

Date: 2005-09-07 05:33 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] megami-maxwell.livejournal.com
So much win. XD And
"You leave me out of it," Kio grumbled on the other side of Ritsuka, packing up his supplies. "And give me back my shirt before you get pervert on it."
totally made my night. Though I'm certain Natsuo's a boy, so I was a little confused higher up in the fic. But it's hard to tell with him. X3 Over all it made me obscenely happy~ :heart:

Fantastic Job!

Date: 2005-09-07 05:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thinkwell.livejournal.com
Yet another fantastic job. =)

I loved the Zero!Love hints.

Hahahahahaha. ZERO FIC! ZERO FIC!!!!!

TeeHee....

Hahahaah. I really liked the ending too, the butterfly was really cute.

Date: 2005-09-07 06:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jlarinda.livejournal.com
x3!! Omg Ritsuka with an over-sized shirt...Too cute!!!
Everything..The Zero kids sleeping all tangled up...And Kio being all jealous! And the fangirling of Ritsuka...And Ritsuka posing and staring at Soubi!
Just too cute!!
*is dead*

p.s.: Hope it doesn't bother you that I made a pic of Ritsuka posing :P

Date: 2005-09-07 09:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] allira-dream.livejournal.com
You want to kill me with the cute. Just admit it. I want to quote everything I loved but I don't think you'll appreciate me quoting just about everything.

Loved Zero, loved the 'before perving on it', Kio was great, Soubi laughing because Ritsuka was getting fangirled was amazing, and you gave me the lovely image of Ritsuka in a big shirt... and Soubi without it. =D You soooo rock.

(And I think I saw that you ALSO write Hikaru no Go? My, I may end having to fangirl you!)

Date: 2005-09-07 04:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] svz-insanity.livejournal.com
I think Wolfie already pointed out everything I wanted to say... but I think that every time you post, you exceed my expectations like whoa. <333 I love the idea of Ritsuka modeling, the butterfly, and Kio. Squee! I need to finish the series! <33 ^^

Date: 2005-09-07 05:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chikaji.livejournal.com
"You don't want to do that," Soubi said pleasantly.

xD genious ♥! If I were Soubi I would kill this model *lol*


I loooo~ve this fic ♥ ... and *g* I´m looking forward to some pervert-shota fic again ^^

Date: 2005-09-07 08:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
*awards your well-earned million points* You just know Wakato would do this in college, right?It would be glorious.

Thanks! Yeah, I admit that once I started thinking about the oversized shirt, things kind of took a turn for the amazingly pornful worse. At least in HnG, the boys grow up! It's sort of allowable! With Loveless...I think there's just no excuse for us.

But the trip to hell will certainly be a pretty one!

Date: 2005-09-07 09:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
I KNEW you'd get the Wakato joke! you never let me down! ha, and good catch with the typos, I had fixed the gender one already (damn, you're quick), but the other one went right over my head.

KIO! HOW I LOVE TO TORMENT HIM. I love how is really IS a nude model, and soubi is all "yes, that's very nice" *pats on head* haha, and I may now never be able to write a fic without the random Zero cameo, i love making them toy with him, and i LOVE that even Ritsuka knows something untoward has gone on between them.

THE PONYTAIL KINK WAS ALL FOR YOU. Well, i mean, it's my kink too, but the running the fingers through the hair and stuff. ohgod, i want to be the hair elastic. and also, pleasant I WILL KILL YOU is so much more frightening in my world than the person who looks angry while they're breaking your fingers (unless its mugen, in which case it's just hot), and I figured Soubi wouldn't totally lose his cool in his class. Although if Wakato had actually got ahold of Ritsuka, i think that might have been him going right out the window.

YAY YOU LEAVE THE BEST REVIEWS EVER AND NEXT IS PORN I REALLY MEAN IT.

ha, the butterfly is Soubi, yeah, and Ritsuka's caught him, and i was a bit squirmy about the level of metaphor and sap there, but then i figured that if that whole ferris wheel thing is canon, then mine was certainly no worse than that.

Date: 2005-09-07 09:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
haha, Kio is so much fun as the straight-man to Soubi and Ritsuka's insanity. although i use the term 'straight-man' very loosely.

thanks! glad you liked it!

Date: 2005-09-07 09:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
thank you!

Date: 2005-09-07 09:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
haha, yeah, i caught the Zero typo, stupid Natsuo, I always screw him up. Thanks for the catch.

and Kio is love. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Re: Fantastic Job!

Date: 2005-09-07 09:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
Zero is freaking awesome to write. I love having them tooling around in the back of the scene just to toy with Kio.

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Date: 2005-09-07 09:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
*g* so much with the cute! You can't go wrong with Ritsuka, but the shirt thing sent me into a spasm of woobiness when i contemplated it.

If you mean like you took my bit of 'art' and did something with it, that's fine by me. If you mean that you drew something of your own, that's also fine, and I'd love to see!

I'm glad you enjoyed it! thank you!

Date: 2005-09-07 09:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
lol, I wouldn't mind, I love hearing what lines entertained people about my fics. But yes, the cute in this particular fic is pretty deadly.

Yes, any excuse to get Soubi bare-chested and ponytailed is really the best thing on earth. And so is Ritsuka in a ridiculously large shirt.

I do indeed write HnG. The best place to hunt them up is on my website (http://www.sprunkers.com/fanfiction.html), although they've all been posted on my LJ originally.

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it!

Date: 2005-09-07 09:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
aw, thanks sweetie! this fandom's sort of got my by the throat at the moment, I can't seem to write anything else. So I'm glad you're enjoying yourself!

Look forward to more, cause if i don't come up with some porn soon, i think [livejournal.com profile] darkeyedwolf will hunt me down.

Date: 2005-09-07 09:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
haha, i'm not so sure that wasn't Soubi's plan anyhow...

thank you! I'm glad you like it! and there'll be porn soon enough I'm sure. *g*

Date: 2005-09-07 10:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] biggersandwich.livejournal.com
So cute! (And OMG I love Kio. <3)

Date: 2005-09-08 12:13 am (UTC)
instantramen: a woman with black hair and white skin pouring water from a kettle (!)
From: [personal profile] instantramen
Up in the VERRRY first paragraph there's a bit where the italics tag isn't closed properly. And poor Ritsuka, he just van't catch a break EVER (in both the fun and not-fun senses).

Date: 2005-09-08 03:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gyuche.livejournal.com
Awwwwwww <3 So cute! ^-^ The only thing that threw me off a bit (excuse my nitpicking u_u;;) was Ritsuka's giggling. Although I would LOVE to actually see Ritsuka giggle, I don't think it fits with his character well. Maybe a slight smile is all I can picture. XD But that's just me being picky...

Otherwise, I thought it was BEAUTIFULLY written, and Kio and Soubi were perfectly in character <3 Especially Kio, I loved your characterization of him <3 Not to mention the fic was just plain CUTE *squee* :D

Date: 2005-09-08 04:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] darkeyedwolf.livejournal.com
PORN BETTER BE NEXT, BITCH, YOU'VE KEPT STRINGING ME ALONE AND STRINGING ME ALONG AND IT'S PAINFUL. And yet I always come back with big begging eyes, like a puppy that just wants that one slipper to gnaw on and they'll never do it again.

-- at least for the next for few weeks. ♥ ♥

(By the way, another typo spotted on the tenth re-read ((I am shameless)): Ritsuka shot a pleading glance at Soubi, who was laughing to hard to actually help.)

Date: 2005-09-08 09:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hineko-eloriel.livejournal.com
You're relly determined in making me put all of your work in memories, huh? ^_^
The characters are IC as usual, nothing more to say about that. You nail them. ^^
This was incredibly well described and everything, I could really see everything in my head. Really cute too. *grin*
Once again: Well done! *applauds*

Date: 2005-09-08 10:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] riyuen.livejournal.com
The in character-ness of this was an absolute pleasure to read. The only niggle I had was with Soubi blushing when he took his shirt off - I really can't see Soubi being ruffled by girlish admiration; (shinomone-sensei certainly never gets through to him ^__^.) he seems too fixated on simply what Ritsuka does to really care about other people even staring at him.

Minor point. The rest of it was absolutely dead on - and oh! The Zero love sparkled so - they made only a cameo, but they were perfect, all those lovely little touches like Youji in too big pajamas, the snarky comments, sleeping bundled together, and snapping Natsuo's eyepatch! Ritsuka's viewpoint was wonderfully done as well, his self consciousness and the way he feels about Soubi influences his thoughts even though he never says anything...

Enough incoherent squealing. In short, I enjoyed this immensely, and I'm off to check out the rest of your fiction ^__^.

Date: 2005-09-08 11:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chikaji.livejournal.com
*gg* Im so excited *lol*

Date: 2005-09-08 09:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] moonraven-croft.livejournal.com

Hey...didn't know you write in Loveless, too. ^__^

Nice. I like that very much. ^__^

Date: 2005-09-08 10:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
*g* there isn't much I don't write in, once i start watching something.

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Date: 2005-09-08 10:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
hehe, i do too! Thanks!

Date: 2005-09-08 10:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
haha, thanks for the catch. *uses the underutilized nits icon*

lol, i think Ritsuka's getting much more than he wants. er. it's kio who's getting the real shaft. and by getting the shaft, i mean exactly the opposite (unless Zero is involved).

*melts*

Date: 2005-09-08 11:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] zeroluff.livejournal.com
*into a puddle of goo* That was so awesome! I can totally see everyone fawning all over Ritsuka too. XDD

And Zero! *waves flag* You write about them so well. <33

I read over the part about Ritsuka's hands being off, and I thought Soubi had done him holding something else... ^^;

Date: 2005-09-08 11:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] firedraygon97.livejournal.com
Oh, loveloveLOVE!

"No, I mean…I don't…" Ritsuka fell silent, too embarrassed to get the words out that there was no way he looked so slender and graceful, so beautiful and sad. "Soubi…" Ritsuka shook his head to clear it, turning away from the painting. "Take your shirt back."

I like how you have Ritsuka avoiding the issue by changing the topic. It's such a cute scene. ^^

I love your Loveless fics. ♥ Beautiful work.

Date: 2005-09-09 09:01 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vejiicakes.livejournal.com
Somehow I stumbled across your fics amid a relapse of interest in Loveless and ... oh. My. God. This one has dragged me, by the hair and my fluttering little heart, all the way back into the fandom. It's gorgeous! And I don't normally even read genfic (I would consider this genfic enough, given that it is Loveless) but there was something about this one--just the perfect, perfect, spot-on characterizations for everybody pulled me into the story--so vividly I could just see everything happening in my head. There aren't words for how much I adore this. All the scenes are rife with beautiful, endearing little details that I'm thinking, more and more, are going to be ending up in my sketchbook at some point.

You're an amazing writer and I am SO glad I found you and I'm totally friending you and you can't stop me! XD

Date: 2005-09-09 09:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] arctic-dragon.livejournal.com
Mmm...such beautiful descriptions and the Soubi/Ritsuka interaction was extremely cute...
...and Kio's reactions were just so very amusing.

Loved it.

Date: 2005-09-09 11:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
Thank you! I love writing Kio being all frustrated and freaked out.

as for the giggling, it's not the best word, but in the manga Ritsuka is a bit more cheeful than in the show at times, and the word 'laugh' seems a bit too loud to me to describe Ritsuka finding something funny.

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Re: *melts*

Date: 2005-09-09 02:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
haha, not that Soubi is above that or anything...

I really enjoy writing Zero, in particular them toying with Kio. Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

Date: 2005-09-09 02:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
hehe, Ritsuka's not so much about dwelling on things that adults do that make him uncomfortable. Which is, you know, kind of everything.

Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it!

Date: 2005-09-09 02:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
*blushes* aw, thank you. I think it's more about the cute of Ritsuka than about me, but I'm glad you liked it so much.

i think this is about as close to gen as Loveless can get, yes.

sketchbook, yay! As you can tell, I'm not so much the artist myself, but I love seeing what other people do. Please share if you do end up with something *makes Ritsuka eyes*

Thanks so much again!

Date: 2005-09-09 02:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
thanks so much! Kio's great fun to toy with. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Date: 2005-09-09 08:51 pm (UTC)
instantramen: a woman with black hair and white skin pouring water from a kettle (ax)
From: [personal profile] instantramen
Wow, way for me to not check my own comment. XD

Date: 2005-09-11 01:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vejiicakes.livejournal.com
Unf. I caved. Your nervous-Ritsuka-entering-classroom was too adorable for my fluttering heart to resist any longer T___T

Image

Love this fic to tears.

Date: 2005-09-11 03:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mousapelli.livejournal.com
aw, thank you! your drawing is adorable! I love the little bandage on his hand. And his little ear twitches!

thank you so much!

Date: 2006-04-02 02:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sdlucly.livejournal.com
It's really not right for me to be screaming like this, in the middle of the night. Not right at all. *shakes head* But your Soubi and your Ritzuka just take my breath away... and now I can't stop thinking about the crazy mother and I want to write angsty!Soubi!!!! *bounces* *pouts* Oh, the love in the cannon/fandom. *sighs dreamily*

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